Why do you torture me by talking of him,
And right after you left me with pain so grim,
while you are at home in peace and tranquil,
I’m out here so flustered,
I might as well just be left alone.
The things that I have told you,
Aren’t entirely true,
I said I’m all better,
But I can’t stop thinking of you,
I wish this was easier,
But I have no control over you,
I can’t get mad or angry,
Because you have feelings too,
I hoped time would weaken this pain,
But time hasn’t done a thing,
Vacations is about the freedom,
But I’m stuck just worrying,
Just hoping you’ll do what’s best,
Even if I Can’t understand.
A contest entry
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390 points, ended July 22, 2008, 20 entries
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Comments
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Sometimes the things we dont understand hurt us more than if we did unterstand them.
Warmest,
Mylee -
Sorry, you have been DQed for not following procedure.
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the feelings flow with the flow of your words......
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aww thanks ..they kinda do don't they
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Phil, this one is really really good!!!!
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I loved the pure raw emotion in this piece ... very vivid and full of imagery ... As I read more and more, it seems to me that it's so truthful and powerful that this could have been more of a personal experience. either way, It was very beautifully penned from the heart. Good luck in the contest!
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i can understand how your feeling i think everyone experiences pain like this at one point or another in their life
i like the flow of this poem even if it's a few poems strung together as one
-meg
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well. not ganna lie it started as one poem, then 2 then 3 then 4.....then i just was to angery and upset and just put it all in one as is here..... glad you all like my bits of poems
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Nicely written, it is obvious that you were tapping in to some very personal information as it was being written down.
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This was a very meaningful poem to me and hit a definite spot when I've already been so open to emotions.... kind of like an empath, but stronger. This struck an important chord. Thanks and Good luck in my contest.
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