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Trashed and Scattered


Amaranth no longer glows,
suffocated within the flames.
Licking decayed petals,
as I play my games.

Afterlife is so restless,
swamped with thoughtless drones.
So I liberate their pain,
with torn flesh and broken bones.

Forever suffering hurt,
the Illusion of Duality.
Unbound and Invincible,
I rule with brutality.

Silenced with the shock,
stricken, voices grow faint.
Then my anger awakes,
and shows no restraint.

Their unforgiven sins,
tear like jaded skin.
Screams of the lost,
drowning from within.

Draining blood so slowly,
squirm against the chains.
Crushing to a pulp,
then scattering what remains.

Lungs twist and choke,
bile starts to rise.
Turning back the clock,
no-one here dies.

 

Author notes

LadyDementia - still with no muse...
Broken-Forever-Hurt-Restless-Suffocate-Invincible-Thoughtless
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Unforgiven-Stricken-Voices-Faint-Jaded-Scream-Afterlife-Unbound
Lost-Amaranth....Word bank, all used.

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 23, 2008

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    each time i go back and read something that you wrote i am more and more impressed by it, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest


  • Dena62265
    August 17, 2008

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    Wow, what a great write! Words cut right to the bone
    " Lungs twist and choke, bile starts to rise. turning back the clock, no-one here dies" I really liked it. great job!!


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    August 11, 2008

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    Their unforgiven sins,
    tear like jaded skin.
    Screams of the lost,
    drowning from within.

    Very well done....

    ~and you claim to not have a muse?~

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


    • LadyDementia gold member
      August 11, 2008
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      Yes I have lost my muse, very hard to write without it If you see it chain it up for me


  • vici377
    August 3, 2008

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    wow

    and with no muse..perfect rhyme and flow...and so wonderfully dark..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    hon, if this is you without muse, then you are awesome! deliciously dark and definitely worthy of the final round


  • aboomer silver member
    July 27, 2008

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    I'd say your muse is 'alive and kicking butt'!!!
    This is excellent! I LOVE, LOVE your wording. So full of great images - I love all the lines. And I can't believe you did this with a word-bank!!
    WOW!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    July 27, 2008

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    Wow, Blinding!!!

    Deep, dark & unforgiving...
    Oh the exquisite pain...
    Yet another great write that had me on the edge of my seat...
    Well done!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    Wow.. well for no muse.. this is wicked! Brutal and desolate!!!

    The pain sounds relentless and tormenting!!

    Phew.. thank god I don't believe in hell or this would have me either fainting or lol

    Powerful and dark hunny!


  • sanguigno
    July 25, 2008

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    i love it. once again you've traped me in the eerieness and i dont want to leave

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