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Sensical

The words catch against each other;
rough, 
     out of
 
          step,
 
   stu mb
               ling.

Until they are taught a better way,
they merely roll onto the page;
bare feet trying to find the beat.
Written without rearrangement,

       hal-
ting,
 
           p o n d e r i n g,
 
fall
      i
        n
          g
                d
                  o
                    wn.

The author tries in vain for a rhythm,
anything to set these naked letters to;
Until they can understand what syll-a-bles do
they merely fall into place;
Awkwardly holding hands,
grouping into unhelpful sentences and
often leaving the particles out.
Not even punctuation can force the message home:
that words in a poem should convey a meaning;
This isn't the time for shyness,
be bold, socialize, and make some sense!

Author notes

My first try at formatting. Tell me if it helps or hurts!

The title = nonsensical without the negative. It makes about as much sense as the rest of this poem.

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  • Sorcha
    July 27, 2008

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    Your formatting made me chuckle. I love this. The last two lines were my favorite: you demand that the poetry conform to what you need it to do, and it really conveys that struggle that all authors can have with their work. *laughs* The title was a great idea, too.

  • MortalPhoenix
    July 22, 2008

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    I usually don't like poems about poems, but this one really impressed me. Very original and well written. And the formating is great.
    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.