for a moment just imagine
let it sink into your mind
the picture of a young girl
no more then four or five
her golden hair of ringlets
unwashed hanging dirty strands
concealing angelic features
as angels watch and weep
she sit's within a corner
of the only room she can
rocking back and forward
neglected and forgotten
again please do imagine
this child in your mind
sitting in a room alone
as the world goes by
see the empty spaces
see her unloved soul
as all the ones around her
come and then they go
words of broken promises
like pictures on her walls
the only comfort that she has
as she sings herself to sleep
Author notes
Option 4:Any poem written about or for a child
A contest entry
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Comments
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So many children all over the world are doing this right now. Heartbreaking.
Sheila
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Wow, this is really deep. I loved the ending of it, but the imagery of it is very powerful, and very beautiful. This really is a heartbreakingly beautiful poem, and evern more heart breaking because it really happens.
Well done.
God Bless,
Larkbird -
This was really well written. So sad. A child that feels all alone. Maybe from a abused home? I don't know this touched me right through to deep down in my soul. Thanks! ~~Iridessa~~
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beautiful, true, good job...just imagine...that some people, though they may grow up, inside, that little girl is still sitting in the far, dark corner, of their mind, all alone, still feeling forgotten.
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Awww how phenomenally sad and moving
This is just sooo sad and sooo moving, gee it brought more than a 'solitary tear' to my eyes!
I can relate to this as someone who has been there, done that, worn the T shirt. And in adult life also, where the eternal inner child within me still bears the scars and feels the same anguish.
You have peened such depth of emotion here, and empathized phenomenally with those who have experienced this sort of anguish, bravo for that, that takes phenomenal talent.
Good luck in all contests with this and your other work hope you win Gold, you should for poems as fantastic as this. This is poet Laureate standard and 10/10 for emotion and empathy.
Well done, love it, write on.
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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an exciting poem for me
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I do like this poem a lot, but I'm gonna be very honest here.
I've seen it all before.
There are so many poems on this website that are like this I am now kind of getting bored of this style and idea.
Still good work though.
Samuel -
There is broken heart through this poem for a child forgotten, neglected and the Lord knows what else...My heart breaks for this child and wants to rescue her...A beautiful write, very sad, moving...but so revealing...
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Im still in awe from the last time i read this poem but i still am amazed on how great this poem is and how much i love reading it from beginning to end.
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What a great description and story of the prompt... The image of it is painted beautifully in the poem. You describe how she's neglected and forgotten wonderfully.
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I can see this picture, painted beautifully by your words
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aww so sad and tragically true in life. You are extreamly talented writer. Your poems are above wow
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Painfully Wonderful
This is sad, and you did a wonderful job keeping the reader focused on exactly how that little girl felt. The troubling pain and ignorance of what is going on around her, yet knowing this whole picture is wrong and there is nothing more she can do than do the one thing that gives her hope: sing. Most wonderful!
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Im in awe i cant even find words on how much this poem speaks to me,its wonderfuly written but i was wondering if when you wrote "concealing angelica features" you meant to write "angelic"
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