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Swinging into action!!!

 

In life she sung and swung upon the stage

To entertain the men who lived alone

The most exciting singer of her age

 

A fan got drunk and in a mighty rage

He put a single bullet through her head

And wiped the famous singer from the page

 

The gods could not accept that she was dead

And asked that she would sing her song again

Before she's laid in her eternal bed

 

Just close your eyes and listen for each strain

Her song will come to you from clouds above

And all of nature joins in her refrain

 

Each day a fairy gives the swing a shove

And underneath the clouds she softly sways

So everyone can hear and fall in love

 

The song she sings will haunt me all my days

The sight of her the sweetest I could know

She left me in a soft romantic haze

 

I heard her song and saw her long ago

On purple ribbons trailing from the sky

And every day my love for her must grow

 

I never had a lover who could fly

Whose skin took on the shades of sunset glows

I'll be in love with her until I die

 

Her face is like the petals of a rose

Her song is of a lark in Yorkshire's dales

She rains her song to wash away my woes

 

And when I die I'll take immortal sails

And we'll duet the gods to earn our wage

Our love will feed a million minstrels tales

     The only way I can escape my cage

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The form is Terza Rima. This is an ancient form, Dante's Inferno etc are written in it. Like his mine are in iambic pentameter but they don't have to be although each line should follow the same meter.
The rhyming goes aba cbc dcd ede ... zyzy
finishing with a four line stanza to use up the left over rhyme. The last line is often indented, but that's just because that's how the first printed examples were done.
Just to tidy this one up I finished with the same rhyme I started with.

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 23

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    Aww so sad! Yet a beautiful tale of love. You have told this story so well. Quite a journey we go along.. wonderful!


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 21

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    Boffo!

    I'll say it again.
    Boffo!
    This poem is Boffo! It has Boffo! all over it.

    Seriously, this was a challenging piece, I'd say, and you make it look easy. Almost easy.

    I know it's not the key to the piece but I just love the line ... "to entertain the men who live alone" ... and there they are, plain as day, poor, lonely sots.

    Luvit.


  • notorious silver member
    July 21

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    I can't write anything half-decent if it's form/literally a "pretty" poem. So I commend you...

    "To entertain the men who lived alone"
    Like a white geisha dressed in purple...MUAHAHAHA.

    "And wiped the famous singer from the page"
    How incredibly rude...!! Nice line.

    "And all of nature joins in her refrain"
    Very groovy rhyme with 'strain'.

    "Whose skin took on the shades of sunset glows"
    Looks like you tabbed the 'Space' bar an extra time...there seems to be 2 spaces after 'skin'.
    "shades of sunset glows"<--AWESOME

    Good luck (:


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 21

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    Oh wow!! You were certainly on a roll here! A beautiful tale you've told and in form, superbly done. I do like the mention of the Yorkshire Dales, I live near there Truly a stunning poem, thank you for your entry and good luck