A refreshing cascade
dispensing the ground.
Scanning out rhythm
with a patter or a pelt.
Tears falling from our
Ariel heights weeping
with anger from its
sometimes deluged sight.
A contest entry
- Rain. Rain. Rain. by rosie4491.
450 points, ended August 7, 2008, 33 entries
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Comments
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Oh I like this. Short and Sweet. Nice flow as well. Best of luck in my contest.
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Excellent
Wonderful creation for the theme. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest
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Excellent take on the prompt and portrayed with an abundace of metaphore & Imagery!
Well Done & Best of Luck in the contest!
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Interesting twist you gave, I like you for all that my fond child. Your heart is velvet smooth..that gave out such beauty through pen,,all the best in your life
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I honestly think this is one of your best hun
The metaphor is wonderful
Scanning out rhythm
with a patter or a pelt - awesome lines
Best wishes to you in the contest
Julie x
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wonderful write maralisa
x judie x
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So very true...tears from heaven, you have to wonder how often we cause them...lovely flow and word choice...very soft and enjoyable read which makes you think...
Best to you!
mystic
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