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Raindrops

The dripping of the eaves comforts me,
Alerts me to the cleansing of the world,
And saddens me, because my soul
Still remains tainted.

Oh, how I wish the rain would flood my heart,
Wash away all the thoughts and feelings that shame me
And leaving an organic freshness in it's wake.

Perhaps one day I shall be so lucky.
One day the rain will fall on me.

And allow the grass to grow once again.

Author notes

I kind liked this idea. I hope my poem works, I've kinda been in a melodramatic mood lately, and I know it shows in my work. Let me know!

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  • rosie4491
    July 26, 2008

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    Wow. That sent a chill through my spine! Yes. This is what I'm looking for. The emotional side of the rain. Congrats and BEST of luck in my contest.

    Keep it up. =]


  • MYsecondchance
    July 21, 2008
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    wow this is very good a very interesting point and a very good viewpoint great job
    Ryan


    • Tamaska Forsaken
      July 22, 2008
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      Hey, thanks for the comment! It's nice to know that people are reading my stuff...

      Take care
      Tamaska


  • greyhaime
    July 21, 2008

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    the rain is awesome, I used to not feel this way but I had a very good friend show me the value of the rain. to clear the air the eyes and the soul..
    good luck with the contest!
    Grey