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Summer Storm

Breaking through the cloud cover
as sunshine catches in the drops of rain
A special shower sizzling on the sidewalk
each fat orb splashing, sparking as it hits
The thunder takes a silent pondering moment
snapshots of lighting across the horizon
The sharp grey clouds calm with the torrent
regaining their soft pillow semblance
the baby storm sleeps, snuggled deep within
Returning to her rest, the simplicity of a nap
Though the rain is sincere in her wish to return
enjoying the snippets of earth she has tasted

Author notes

Words used, in order: sunshine, special, sizzling, sparking, silent, snapshots, soft, snuggled, simplicity, sincere, snippets.

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  • squirrelgirl
    January 24

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    Now I feel inspired to enter a contest.
    'A special shower sizzling on the sidewalk
    each fat orb splashing, sparking as it hits'
    That part is pretty. It's my favorite for this poem. I've never really though of rain drops being fat orbs.


  • Amaranthine Lover gold member
    August 31, 2008
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    overall, this is beautiful!
  • carole21
    August 7, 2008

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    nice

    nice write for the word bank . . liked "The thunder takes a silent pondering moment" and "The sharp grey clouds calm with the torrent" . . well done


  • Elfin
    July 24, 2008
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    Beautiful. Well done and good luck in the contest. Val


  • Frogzter gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    Ah, another great piece produced from the word bank. I especially enjoyed the creativity of this one. Thanks for entering and best wishes,

    Frogz~

  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 21, 2008

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    This was lovely. Magnificant personification used within and I love the terminology incorporated and the ashtonishing imagery. My favourite line was 'The thunder takes a silent pondering moment
    snapshots of lighting across the horizon', this was infact a glorious poem.

    ~Emily~ xx


  • Frozentearz
    July 21, 2008

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    This was very creative, Love the double meaning this can take on, great job with the word bank and thanks for joining in,
    Blessings,
    Frozentearz
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