Deprived of sight the
creeping flesh shivers
with a foul discharge
through its disembodied spirits.
Cloudiness filters through
the air leaving no stone unturned
as the night-tides blindness
excreted a stack of
ancient blood stained bones.
Author notes
not very good at dark poems
A contest entry
- Darkness reigns over AP by daviscth.
2700 points, ended August 3, 2008, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Dark deep imagery you have created with this awesome poem.
Short and totally wonderful
Captured me
Best wishes and good luck in our contest
Julie -
I think this is an awesome dark poem. The imagery is wonderful and I love the picture. Thank you for posting.
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For someone who isn't good at dark poems, you have created something grim here. I like the "foul discharge" and "night-tides blindness excreted" and ancient bones, of course. Graphic imagery.
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wonderful
Terrific creation. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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dark tenor perfectly done, I also do not relish dark but this is done with imagination dear child
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ooh i like this lisa its beautiful,
this is dark and i love it,
all my love,
kitty xxx -
Oh this gave me goosbumps
well done write here
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Wonderfully dark and well done for the picture...I am working on that one but seem to be no where as wonderfully deep as you...the ending is perfect and haunting...lovely!
Best to you!
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