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The Unspoken

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My dreams can be captured
within this warm exotic exhale. 

No words, just breath...

fluttering upon your lips,
daring you to slip ~

~ past this union of space
thickening with mingling sighs...

desperate to know,
if the tremble
                         

carrying the unspoken
is truth or lies...

Author notes

My AP Name: delightfulmess


Picture was found at photobucket.com
and was used for one of my quickies. I loved the image
so much I had to write my own take.

Hope you all like it

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Comments

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  • penman gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    wonderful

    Very well done. A great take on the prompt. Congratulations on the silver


  • gllarso
    September 10, 2008

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    I can see why this is another of your favorites, beautiful. We all say that we want to know the truth, but somtimes we are too willing to believe the lies, even when we know they are lies...if only because it is what we want to hear.
    -Garret


  • Beret55 silver member
    September 10, 2008
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    And cong on your shinneytoo. Good write..

  • ecrivain01
    September 3, 2008
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    Marvelous ...

    congrats on your shiny trophy.


  • thepoetssoul
    August 4, 2008

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    Tis a most beautiful penning indeedI love the imagery and the feeling you put behind your words,longing for that kissAnd the wondering if it's all worth it.Magical poem you have penned in vivid colour and taste

    Tony


  • creationsfromheart
    August 1, 2008

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    OHHHHHHHHHHHHH I love this one it is creative beautiful and non the less a beautiful write, I love this and I think you will definatly become a favorite with this creative write, plus you are pretty special


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 30, 2008

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    Oooh. I like the essence of this poem. So beautifully soft and quite with an air of mystery. I have been too long away from your poems beauty. This was just refreshing to read and enjoy. ~Pamela

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    This is great I love the picture also I hope that you are doing well thank you for sharing this with me love you loads

  • Bob Fox
    July 21, 2008

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    well

    the picture and the poem seem to say so much. It does make one wonder , at times, if there is much truth in us . well done poet.


  • Riamh
    July 21, 2008
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    Beautiful

    Very expressive. Thank you for sharing


  • MyMudPies
    July 21, 2008

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    that is deeply romantic. I don't know what it was about it but i made me feel very warm inside, like the brush of a loves lips. I was erotic without being erotic. I really enjoyed this, Great Write!


  • Angelflower
    July 21, 2008

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    I truly don't know why but this beautiful piece brought tears to my eyes.. It was full of wonderful emotion..

    For some reason I feel like I can relate to this piece in some way..There are so many different ways to take this write.. Thank you very much for sharing this..


    Angel


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    Such a soft piece you have written for the picture. Enjoyed reading. Juls


  • crimsondew
    July 21, 2008
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    Wonderful take dear...love this !


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    Gorgeous!

    Ohhh hun this is just gorgeous! I also find the need sometimes to write for pictures I use that just captivate me!

    I just love "warm exotic exhale" .. that really sets the feel of the write and the dreams..

    Then:
    "No words, just breath..."
    Wow.. that is just fantastic! Words sometimes aren't needed are they?

    The next verse is tantalizing and sensual I found

    And then it just gets more and more intense in feeling... it's like that tension between two people...

    And the wanting to know if it is felt as you do.

    WOW... beautiful!! And a bookmark for me!




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