Hypnotize me & make me believe
Your actions aren’t meant to [deceive]
After all
You’re just a boy lost inside himself
& That’s all there is to it.
I should’ve known it would never work
...the signs were completely clear
I guess it was losing this developed “relationship” I came to fear
If you really care you have to let me go
& never let these rational feelings show
You made your decision a long time ago
Use your meaningless words just to taunt me
So your intentions come off as if you want me
After all
You’re just a boy lost inside himself
& That’s all there is to it.
Who I am
To take part in this emotionless chase?
But then again who are you to drag me there in the first place?
You know you’ve got to let me go
I won’t let these indecisive feelings show
I made my decision a long time ago
Break my walls down & leave me bound & broken
So you’ve immortally become outspoken
But, wait
You’re just a boy lost inside himself
& That’s all there is to it.
Do your deadly eyes see my hidden scars?
Are you watching me take a step [too far]
After all
I’m just a girl lost inside herself
& That’s all there is to it.
Author notes
I love poetry!
YoureNoGoodForMe
15 years old
168 poems
title option #3
A contest entry
- I like variety so I'm giving you lots of options! by the evil angel.
475 points, ended August 27, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ohmygawd, this was FANTABULOUS!!! I seriously just freaking LOVE YOU TO DEATH and that's all there is to it. =]
*You’re just a boy lost inside himself
& That’s all there is to it.*
Afreakingmen. Love that<333 SO TRUE.
*Do your deadly eyes see my hidden scars?*
Aww, I really liked that metaphor/imagery in that line..it struck me the hardest, I'm not sure why haha
I absolutely loved the way this flowed mandalicious. Great!!<3333
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I like the meaningful repetition at the end of each stanza. It helps emphasizes the importance of the ideas behind it. It gets kind of confusing when you have all of these bold and italised areas mixed in there. Some of them are in odd places and it makes it confusing as a reader. Cutting down on those a bit more would make it a lot easier to read. I really like this poem in general, though. It was well written and expresses something a lot of us can relate to. Good job
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keeping on beating against the glass till you shattered..mend you back just to be shattered again..until you're far too damaged too scared..letting you hidden in the darkness..killing yourself little by little till there's no more left to lingered..
Keep penning sis!!!
Lieu
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wonderful poem. well expressed feelings/emotions and the pic you added gave this a "wow factor"
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Fantastic!!!
great work
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option number...?
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fixed it =)
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