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Irredeemable and Unattainable

Irredeemable and Unattainable,
Till the end of time my love had remained unshakeable,

You were untouchable, a love that was forbid,
A temptation so great my heart of you I could not rid.
We knew what we had always wanted, the others presence true,
But love was so much of a task, it was never an emotion to you.

You were the priceless item that sat upon the shelf,
Teasing and tempting till my desire did melt.
I thought I had the gift card with all the riches to claim you love,
But a love of pure passion and truth for you was never exciting enough.

7th of august 1986 our fate was all but written,
For us to fall in love and cojoined become so smitten unable to resist,
Destined to torture In the tornado of love,
That tore through our hearts like this.

You were Irredeemable and Unattainable,
Our love was unsustainable with a cheater notion you could never resist,
A love grew with emotion but your sexual desire was a reason you could never commit.
I kept handing you the key to me, gave answers to every question asked,
Remained the sole nurturer of a love that was destined too never last.

My heart was broken but a thousand times,
The jagged edges of harmful pieces sharp began to grind inside.
You left me closed but my heart wide open to slice to death my every sense,
My love for you had become not the imagined fairy tale,
But a pain-staking tortured extinguished mess.

You were irredeemable and unattainable,
Our love was unsustainable, My heart unbreakable,
Until you smashed through it’s loving walls,
Leaving me to drown in blood,
Of a love that held so many promises,
But failed to deliver them at all.

Any feedback would be most appreciated havent written anything in a long time

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  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    WOW!

    Very powerful words.
    You had set the imagery in this piece quite well.
    I enjoyed reading it.
    Thanks for the share.

    -Mandi


  • ourgirlFriday
    July 21, 2008

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    OK-here goes:

    Good poem overall. Typo stanza 3, line 3: you-->your
    Other than that, reads well, flows well - like what I'm going through: read, if you please, http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/4443731

  • Leiceylou
    July 21, 2008
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    This is about a love that I love. that as much as it was mine was only almost there in everyway.