By the sea she stands
darkness falls upon her heart
until the day he comes home
separating their long part
but he will not return
long since fallen to his fate
for over 300 years
she has stood alone in wait
some say it was the grief
that led her to this place
once a thriving shore
now a dark and empty space
you can still hear her moan
when the moon has risen high
and its told in an eclipse
you can see her passing by
mourning for her man
her heart for him does burn
the lady of the sea
still hopes for his return
Author notes
Option 2 Ghosts 
the whole idea here is love is stronger then death an even though shes been dead like 300 years she still waits for her true love to return to her
A contest entry
- Darkness reigns over AP by daviscth.
2700 points, ended August 3, 2008, 26 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Dark, The Dead, And the Hopelessly Romantic. by Demonic Beauty.
450 points, ended October 16, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love beyond death by Minstrel-Morose.
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Comments
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Awwwwwwwwwww so sweet!!! girrrrrr This is going to be a difficult contest to judge
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The last stanza is so sad
Moving piece you have created here for us to share
Thank you and best wishes in our contest
Julie -
I agree
With all of the comments below. Not only have you written a beautiful story with such a magnitude of feeling. You've written it flawlessly. Such pain, sorrow,loss and love aches through this piece and i feel it strongly. You've got such amazing talent that i envy so. GORGEOUS piece, m'dear.
<333
~IvoRy
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Now this is goosebump material and I really enjoyed it. You should think about doing a part 2. Thanks so much for your entry.
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thanx hmmm a part 2 like him coming back maybe
i gotta think about that
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wowowo that gave me goosebumps...i loved it ^^
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damn
this is amazing.......i love the way you brought the picture to life with your words.....(scratches her computer screen to try and erase her stupid one) hugssss sweetie
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I really, really, really think this is one of the best pieces I've read of yours Lizz and I hope you do great in the contest.
And you told me you weren't inspired!
I love the pic
&& even without it, I could've seen it all in my head. The imagery was amazing.
There's so many stanzas that I loved...
But, this has to be my fav!
"some say it was the grief
that led her to this place
once a thriving shore
now a dark and empty space"
~~ I know it's some other peoples fav too but I couldn't leave out saying how pretty it sounded.
Awesome
Wish ya lots of luck in the contest! knock their socks off and all of that
Sincerely
Podo ~
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OMG, you went almost the same way with the picture as I did. Mine is about Jason. Don't laugh, but I thought I would become a ghost because of all that was left unsettled between us. I didn't know if he was dead. I didn't know if he just left me because he was a jerk. I didn't know if I did something wrong to chase him away. All I knew is I was a girl waiting and waiting and waiting. I thought I would die waiting and become a ghost because of it. Don't laugh! I really thought this and it scared me.
That's why the picture hit me so hard and I had to enter.
LOVE THE POEM. Especially this:
"some say it was the grief
that led her to this place
once a thriving shore
now a dark and empty space
you can still hear her moan
when the moon has risen high
and its told in an eclipse
you can see her passing by"
Sent chills down my spine.
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Superb.
A bittersweet love story penned here, young poet. Like this take on the picture. Good one.
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WOW! this is brilliant...I love the mournful tone of this piece, and the love that endures...so beautiful..we should be so lucky to experience such a love as this!
Well done for a superb write, and all the best in the contest.
Thanks for sharing,
Luck.
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