I’m writing a poem about myself
For you see I am dead
There will be no more laughing or crying
Or thoughts going through my head
I didn’t understand
I didn’t know why
Everyday I thought of suicide
Everyday I wanted to die
I didn’t tell anyone
I was scared of what they’d say
I was scared they’d think I’m crazy
And lock me away
So I didn’t tell anyone
I kept it all inside
Each day added more pain
And little by little I died
I didn’t have to many friends
But my friends were the best
I thought others I knew were stupid
And I hated the rest
Now they are all here
Staring at my grave
Staring down upon a girl
None of them could save
My biggest fear had always been
Losing all my friends
So when I moved away
I knew my life would have to end
I’m sorry for leaving you
I know you are sad
I didn’t want it to end this way
But death isn’t all that bad
I didn’t mean to hurt you
I didn’t want you to cry
But I couldn’t take it any longer
I was living a lie
Please don’t forget me but don’t
Remember me as a crazy suicidal
Remember the girl you knew
Who just stopped fighting it all
I know when you heard what happened
To me you didn’t know it was real
You might have had mixed emotions
Not knowing how to feel
Now you must except it
For I am truly gone
Nothing can bring me back
So you must move on
Please don’t blame yourselves
This was always my goal
I overdosed on pills
Kill the body to free the soul
These are my last words
To those I dearly love
Know I love and will watch over you
From far below or high above.
A contest entry
- Suicide Note by newnoakua.
700 points, ended August 6, 2008, 39 entries
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Comments
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I liked it!
It's full of beautiful emotion -
awesome! i love it! it is soo sad but it written so well! it was so deep and emotional..great job i couldn't stop reading it
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Nicely written narrative poem that sounded pretty realistic. I could see a young teenager writing this before departing our world. What more could we ask for?
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awww wow this was great. full of emotion.
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wow this is so sad.. but so good ^^
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wow this is sad..... but it was so lovely... very emotional.. all this imagery of the story u were telling made me want to cry.....
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wow... this was very nice. Emotional... deffinetly. There wer a couple gramatical errors, but nothing bad. It was rather well written, but the rhyme, while good through most of the poem, seemed slightly forced in a couple places.
"These are my last words
To those I dearly love
Know I love and will watch over you
From far below or high above."
That was an amazing stanza. Great ending!
Good job and best of luck in the contest! -
Hmm..
This was a well written piece.
A bit of forced rhyme throughout and spelling errors also.
Scarred - Scared
Just a pet peeve of mine. Nice ending and good flow.
Good luck and hope I could help!
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