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Silk of the Orient



Take me far into
the bloom of peach
where your hair might
tangle me in nectar

I will weave fevered bees
through silk to find
the origin of strands

you are the orient
minted jasmine
the mulberry leaves
feeding caterpillars
creating me exquisite

your hands claim captivity
with skin, I wind you up
inside the tangled web
that spins a golden spider
to have you love me





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1 & 2 Weltt
3 & 4 Cannonsfire

Thank you hun, it's beautiful

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  • CaliOkie silver member
    August 6

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    This poem elicits so much tactile and olfactory response. And I hear the bees as well. I am lost in my senses as I read this one. Well done. Well deserved bronze.

    Garrison


  • Rowan gold member
    August 6

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    What a perfectly, silky piece, this is fabulous. Congratulations!!!


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 6

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    I see you did come up with a great title!! Loved the opening stanza – what wonderful and creative imagery…. It immediately draws the reader in. I would never look at peaches the same way again! You two did a marvelous job with this one… simply love this poem with it colours, it’s scents, imagery and peach-soft sensuality. Beautiful!

    Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • PageTurner
    July 29

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    This is Stunning...
    Such Beauty!



    ~ Nicky♥


  • Just Rob gold member
    July 28
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    Wha a seamless collab. Simply stunning; a three-reader.


  • Pamela A Lamppa gold member
    July 22

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    This is simply stunning. Beautifully full and such a pleasure to read and enjoy. Wow. What a wonderful collaboration. ~Pamela


  • notorious silver member
    July 21

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    Are you done? Your title is the same as your reservation one, amiga.

    "bloom of peach"
    OH MY GOD, I KNOW that phrase is sooo inspired by our bubble tea conversation.

    Maybe not..

    "tangle me in nectar"
    SWEET!
    Like, literally..

    "origin of strands"
    AHAHAHAHA that's so clever.

    "the mulberry leaves
    feeding caterpillars"
    Okay, like this, like this.
    This is crazy--your writing styles are seamless...though your AN helps.

    "claim captivity"
    Heh, nice alliteration.

    "a golden spider"
    Golden Spiderman?

    Good luck


  • notorious silver member
    July 20
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    Is this a collab contest?
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