Remember when you pushed me
and I fell.
That was a funny day.
A friend of mine was pushed,
and she fell
But she didn't find it funny.
And a little boy I know was pushed
and he fell
But he didn't understand that it was funny.
So these days I'm still laughing
not because we fell,
but because we all got up again.
And because we always will.
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Great job!
I really like this. It's extremely personal, with a lot of back story that isn't communicated, but that just adds to the effectiveness. It just adds a joy and lightheartedness to anyone going through a struggling time or any sort of fall...while I'm probably taking your poem further than intended, this is extremely powerful and hopeful.
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This had such a deep meaning behind it!! I thought it was going to be really depressing but it wasn't & was quite inspirational & optimistic.
because I can remember not the fall
but how we all stood back up.- I get what you were trying to say but it sounds a bit awkward.
maybe: So these days I'm still laughing
Not at the fall however;
But at how we all got back up.
But that's just a suggestion.
Great Write!!
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