Darkness sauntered in
Bent low by heavy cloud
Rising skyward
Ominously belching its discomfort
Echoing palsied affliction
Across convivial expanse
Wind whipporwills not far behind
An unblinking papparazzi
Following in blind obedience
Branches let loose at the wrist
A million hands
Painting to and fro
Fingers of light
Reach out for them
Breaking canvas all about
Until at last
One broad,bold stroke
Silence captured
Born again in immortal infancy
Author notes
opt.5
A contest entry
- Calling All Abstract Poets!!!! by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended August 3, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tired of HM's (IX) by PatheticKt.
300 points, ended August 22, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I loved the sensual nature use in this. It made me feel very connected to the sensual part of nature. Thank you for entering and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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Wonderful piece you got here and it's been a long time since I've read an abstract write ^^
I like the imagery here and the fact that each stanza connects in a way
In my opinion, I think this is about suffering . . . if it's not then yes, I'm not creative when it comes to thinking about the real theme behind an abstract piece 
Overall, good poem you got here
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An unblinking papparazzi
Following in blind obedience this line alone is filled with imagery. I like the papparazzi part. Spelling it alone should get you a high-five thank you for entering
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A very well described piece, nicely penned. Great depth of imagery to thought throughout, and so well articulated to boot. I especially enjoyed:
"Darkness sauntered in"...
"Ominously belching its discomfort
Echoing palsied affliction"
.. these lines show a great sophistication and poise ..
"Branches let loose at the wrist"
.. intriguing imagery and metaphor for visual embrace ..
Thank you for your entry!
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Of course this is perfect. I do have to admit I love storms.
=]
I once stood outside in a lightening storm just so I could record it. It was beautiful♥
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Wow...I love the word choice in this...Very abstract for sure. And very strong with the almost story-like stanzas. It sounds like it belongs in an ancient greek mythology book. Good job!
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This was just.. Breath taking. You amazed and delighted..
"Wind whipporwills not far behind
An unblinking papparazzi
Following in blind obedience"
Those three lines were just WOW, best of luck dear friend.
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