Beware words once said
to a heart now brittle..
Touching with tender
caress like a dance
to melodies of ocean breezes..
Frozen breath, lungs expand
to discover winter wonder lands...
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This is great sweety you are so darn good at these quickies very nice indeeed thanks for sharing love you loads be good
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Nicely done... love the melodies of ocean breezes... Great take on the prompt...
Ken
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Beware words once said to a heart now brittle..Frozen breath, lungs expand to discover winter wonder lands... a very beautiful take on the promt good luck in the contest
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I think our words should always be tender and gentle for we know not what a heart has had to endure!
Beautiful sissy!
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Love, C Beautiful sissy 
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Thanks..
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Love the word 'brittle'--it sounds so brittle, and you found a great place to use it. (:
The "Beware" has a nice foreboding effect BTW (:
"to melodies of ocean breezes.."
Why not "to ocean breeze melodies"? (: Just an idea...I think it sounds better that way.
Love your second stanza--it's so cold AND ethereal simultaneously...awesome!!
Good luck
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Very beautiful...what a lovely and creative take on the picture...great metaphor and imagery...truth in words of warning...well done...
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great piece! "touching with tender caress like a dance; to melodies of ocean breezes.." "to discover winter wonder lands..." beautiful
good luck
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