Teardrops hit the pavement
just like splattered paint.
The ground is my canvas
& you are my subject
so don’t move I have to paint you just right
including that vile look in your eyes.
It’s time to put my heart on lockdown
cause it’s been invaded so many times
then torn apart & destroyed completely.
So I barricade my body and put up my armor,
close up every entrance into my heart
& shut off my senses for the time being.
I’ve stared into your eyes for so long
that I’ve become so oblivious to my surroundings,
& I forgot how to look away and move at my own speed.
So baby, look into my crystal ball
& gaze into your future, for I won’t be in it.
You’ll learn that you’re not the only enchanter in the world.
So don’t mess with me, cause I can play just as dirty as you.
You’re the one stain on my reputation
You tarnished my heart
& blackened my lungs,
by teaching me to be just as rebellious as you.
I inhaled the smoke for every lie you’ve ever told.
You were notorious for pain, but I didn’t believe it
so I drew in deeper breaths
until my lungs couldn’t expand anymore
& I had to let you out.
In a list
A contest entry
- Calling All Abstract Poets!!!! by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended August 3, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Stunning piece!
This one would have probably been my choice were it collaborated with the contest-holder. I see the visuals that mingle with the abstract. It helps me "sense" the abstract to have texture.
Wonderful words that describe much of what I have
experienced, and not just rhetoric. My opinion, of course!
This was a wonderful contest and an eloquent selection.
Love this line:
"I inhaled the smoke for every lie you’ve ever told.."
Contratulations!
and as my own
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This is incredible! The angst itself - so truly poignant in a wonderfully vivid sense. A very well spoken piece, abstract - but in a way that is clear, to that thought provoking degree.
"Teardrops hit the pavement
just like splattered paint.
The ground is my canvas
& you are my subject"
.. a great beginning to weave the tale, nice imagery ..
"So baby, look into my crystal ball
& gaze into your future, for I won’t be in it."
"You’re the one stain on my reputation
You tarnished my heart
& blackened my lungs"...
"so I drew in deeper breaths
until my lungs couldn’t expand anymore
& I had to let you out."
.. this I outlined for the presence - such a great metaphor to roll around minds hungry palate ..
Well done. Thank you for your entry!
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You’re the one stain on my reputation
You tarnished my heart
& blackened my lungs,
by teaching me to be just as rebellious as you.
I inhaled the smoke for every lie you’ve ever told.
You were notorious for pain, but I didn’t believe it
so I drew in deeper breaths
until my lungs couldn’t expand anymore
& I had to let you out.
flawless. -
A very personal piece.
Thank you for entering.
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Teardrops hit the pavement
just like splattered paint.
The ground is my canvas
& you are my subject
je t'aime. a lot.
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