How long did we sit on that beach
writing our names in hearts on the sand?
How long ago does it seem to you
that we had a long conversation?
But you don't remember,
or you won't remember:
you're ashamed; ashamed of me.
And that shows on me and haunts me
while I now stand all alone.
The waves lap up upon our sand;
erasing letters we left alone.
The waves lap up upon my feet
sweeping away my feelings for you.
The waves lap up upon my dress
and slowly, surely take away
my spirit; what I left you with;
you took from me and left without a trace.
Author notes
Picture Prompt.
Meant to be lyrics.
Sorry!
Happy Birthday, Cassondra!
A contest entry
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Comments
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This poem is absolutely lovely, and very sad as well. the imagery throughout of the beach and the sand is beautiful, and the whole idea behind it is easy to relate to:
"The waves lap up upon my dress
and slowly, surely take away
my spirit; what I left you with;
you took from me and left without a trace."
Wow. wow. wow. a really wonderful write. your poetry will go far
- Katie
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But you don't remember,
or you won't remember:
ugh, I can relate.
brilliantly worded. -
This is a good poem.
Could you read the last rule in my contest?
Before I do anything Drastic -
this is a nice write! I like the wording and the ending is good
thank you for your entry!
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Lyrical and deep
Says so much from the image
Best wishes and thank you for your entry
Julie -
This has such a haunting feel to the words.... Great imagery too. Thanks for posting in this contest.
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Well when life depicts itself, it chooses the ways and means..and the one of the most strong mean is the love and its joy and pain..you sketched the pain here with a depth..wonderful indeed....
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What wonderful words taking into account your age. They have an air of maturity beyond your years. Well done
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It is such a sad message ...
letters of love written on sand ... abandoned ... now washed away. And what happened to the feelings which were carried by the words?
I loved your story on MyBaby. Please post it on your page.
Love
Myra
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