I laid by the midnight tracks
watching flames burn the air.
Crackling and crunching neared
as blood pooled beside me.
Steel toes poked my ribs,
I flinched in whimpering tears.
Years of fear knelt beside me,
looking into my eyes,
and brushed my hair
with deceptive caresses.
Darkness seeps in shadows,
his darkness overwhelmed the shadows.
He won, he controlled me,
my life, my thoughts,
his plan succeeded,
dread of him filled me
like blood in my veins.
I realized in defeat
I was still going to die,
A good life led and yet-
a stalkers target.
Why....
Author notes
2nd prompt: Darkness seeps in shadows.
A contest entry
- Darkness reigns over AP by daviscth.
2700 points, ended August 3, 2008, 26 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hi could you read one more? My Lunch With Katy? I just re-wrote it. thanks lisapoet
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Loved it. Great imagry. Very vivid words, "crackling, crunching". Very scary when I imangined him, brushing your hair and looking into your eyes. I could feel the fear. Every woman's fear of being overpowered.
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congrats, poem with great depth. Speaks poignant moments
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awesome!
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Wow I am so pleased you chose my quote
A powerful poem reaping deep thoughts and a stalkers target ... why!
Best wishes to you and thank you for your entry
Julie -
This actually gave me goosebumps as I was reading it. The imagery is wonderful. Thank you for posting in the contest.
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Powerfully dark and real. Good luck in your contest.
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striking visuals and I really like the last word. A haunting question ...
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You've certainly taken your prompt into an unexpected direction. One can really feel for the victim narrating the piece. The anger and outrage, is not so much as the humiliation and defeat at the moment being described, but it is there in it's subtle way. This is quite dark, and you did very well with it. Good luck.
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