Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Change

So many people say
It's hard to change.
But if our thoughts
Can change water,
And we are moslty of water,
Then the possibilities for change

Are endless and
With just a single thought
We could change the world.

A contest entry

what can i do to improve

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Desire gold member
    July 25, 2008

    Edit | Reply

    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Change
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ I am being drawn to words: With just a single thought- We could change the world...Love that line...also the word: moslty- line 5- looks like a hiccup- mostly...I have them a lot but wanted to let You know out of courtesy and after reading Your words I kept being shown a bowl -copper and what appears to be a bamboo stick tapping it for some reason also being shown how negative and positive energy can alter the water- alter its composition- - whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully that makes some sense...
    Excellent take on the prompt in ten lines (more or less) ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~