Everyday I wake up and it's the same
Don't know what happened yesterday
But I know that I feel real lame
I grab the bottle and plate
Apologize to you for coming in late
Minutes after I feel so much better
Maybe even decide to write you a letter
If only I had the power of will
To move beyond these stupid pills
I'm glad you can't see me like this
But I still miss the feel of your kiss
I think if you were still around
You wouldn't be happy with the sight you found
I've fallen in this way too deep
Hours pass and I need two more
Wandering through life half asleep
Oblivious to the things that cut me so deep
My friends are all to busy for me
And it seems to fill me with violent envy
As I sit down and contemplate my end
I realize how powerless I now really am
I'm just a slave to this dumb addiction
Killing everyone with my mindless affliction..
Author notes
This was written at a really bad point in my life, and explains my situation as well as that of others with the same problem I had. All comments are appreciated.
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I love the last two lines of this poem. I hope you're life is going better now, and I wish you luck in the contest.
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last 2 lines definatly my favourite!!.
i can relate to this, how time just seems to pass on by. -
it reminds me of when i havent seen someone in a long time and then after seeing them they are like 'what the hell happened to you' i hate the sting of that look
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Wow sorry for that peat in your life I wish I was there to ease things but sadly all I have to give you is words of offered support. Write more I'm looking forward to more of your work as I know you are a talented writer. When I read your poem it reminded me of when I was on Heroin luckly the paramedics told my Mum and she helped me off them. Your poem is an inspiration to us all well done and thanks for sharing
take care
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You R A Superstar
Reading this poem is like staring endlessly at a deep, raw gash. Some parts of your poem... well, I felt that way at one point of time. Am not into drugs, but yes, life did feel the same. I can identify with those lines "wandering through life half asleep" - exactly how I felt when I was without a job. And I did feel that my friends were too busy for me (they are even now). I feel as if I have everything, yet I have nothing. There's nothing to look forward to when I wake up in the morning. So what? There's AP. Just login and pour your heart out. It is surprising how morbid feelings turn to words with a diamond's lustre - when you let your poems speak for you. Great work... Yes, everyday IS the same. But we need to shift in our energy fields to make our own small universe better. Good luck and God bless
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jaded teardrop
this was a really deep piece, and I loved it. I thought it was amazing how you worded all of this emotion and regret and put it in to this wonderfull piece.. everybody goes thro bad times in their lives, but not everybody pulls thro and survives...
thank you so much for this great read
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This was a great piece. I like how it describes what life is like with the use of drugs, it is in fact powerfully descriptive. The ryhming and terminology couldnt have been better and it was structured perfectly. Good work!!
~Emily~ xx
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