Side-by-side,
We've always been,
Hand-in-hand we faced the world.
You fought my battles,
And I kept your chin up.
I listened to you cry at night,
And wished I could stop the tears.
Your smile lights up my world.
Your my best friend, my sister, my twin.
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Written January 8th, 2004
A contest entry
- Poem (Tribute) To Someone Special That Means A lot To You. by FriendlyPanther.
350 points, ended January 21, 2004, 27 entries
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I thought this was a beautiful piece on the relationship you have with your sister. Your phrases captured the emotions simply without clogging the ideas with excess. I really enjoy poems on the shorter side that still manage to convey strong feelings. One thing I noticed, the last "your" I think should be "you're". Other than that, a really good piece. Good luck in your contest!
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awwww...this is really sweet! My mom is a twin, and I always wanted one. But alas, all I have is a little brother...I call him Stinky. Not exactly what I was looking for.
But anyway, I liked the style of this peice, it's very short, but it conveys the emotion so well...and anyways, good things come in small packages. (I myself am only 5'2" and gull grown also, so I should know. ) It was a wonderful, heartfelt tribute and I enjoyed the read rather muchly. 
Amanda /f
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Great!
Great write! Very nicely done Thanks for entering! I will be picking a winner and the runner up's around January 10th.
James
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Hilary *whines* you do have a sister. lol.
Why would jillian yell? geez, well.....your sister can do my science homework?
*huggles*
Amanda
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AW! very awesome!!!!! definatly gets to the point with a whole lot of meaning! i love the best friend thing.. its a great way to summarize wat they mean to you and what you are to them very good!
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Jillian would KILL me if she saw this! She yelled at me for She Needs Me, and besides I don't need help with my science homework!
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aww this is so sweet...makes me want a sister real bad...ohh well ya'll can adopt me right? haha yeah right your mom would murder me! just kiddin...ne ways keep in touch babe LOVE YA
luve,
Hilary xoxo -
I like it....Has your sister seen this? lol. Tell her you expect her to do your science homework now. Sharing your talents lol.
This is nice, I can't say anything the people above me haven't said except, English teacher should be proud.
*huggs*
Amanda
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I wish I was that close to my sister. Or my best friend, for that matter. But anyway, I love how simple, how quick, and how powerful it was. Kind of like a punch in the face. You don't see it coming, and it doesn't last long, but you really feel it for a long time afterward. Writing poetry is easy, anyone can do it. But it's the capturing emotion, conveying the abstract in words, that's the difficult thing. And when I read this, I felt all those past experiences I've had with friends and family, and feel the emotion you put into it. Good job.
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Awww.. this poem says a lot in so few words. You really know how to say things that you mean. SOmetimes phrases can lose their meaning if you use to many words to explain them. You kept that in mind with this work. I really liked this. It was short and sweet. It kind of said to me that "I'll protect you from whatever the world throws our way" Good job
Thanx for the comment on my poems!!
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