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Testing Truth



She stepped lightly
upon eggshells of
lost hopes and dreams

~slipping

her reality cracked,

opening her eyes to
what was truth

~freedom in flight

teaching her to
sing again.

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Remembering the Flight by Mihai82000 found at www.deviantart.com

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 6, 2008

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    This is wonderful. I love the italics, they add great emphasis. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Tam
    August 8, 2008

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    ahhhh....yes...

    love the feeling of this write...the hope dwelling behind the cracked dreams...
    beautifully penned and so poignant!
    Thank you for sharing your time and talent with me.
    Blessings! Tammy


  • daviscth silver member
    July 25, 2008

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    the opening stanza sets the mood for this whole piece. I love the imagery in your words. Good luck in the contest.


  • stavykm gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    Excellent

    Oh I needed to read this piece that is for sure.

    Opening her eyes to
    what was truth

    ~freedom in flight

    teaching her to
    sing again.

    Beautiful poem and brilliantly written. Thank you for sharing with me. There is always joy even after such trauma in life. Good luck in the contest.
    Much Love Always
    Kelle Marie


  • maralisa silver member
    July 21, 2008

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    She stepped lightly upon eggshells of lost hopes and dreams freedom in flight teaching her to sing again.wonderful we all need reality checks and dreams
    to keep us spreading our wings of growth good luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 21, 2008

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    I was sure I'd commented on this! Grr AP losing my comments all the time!! Or that could be me clicking around like crazy of course

    Sigh.. sis, I really love this! I feel like I'm slipping sometimes... but this speaks of hope and endurance and I think we all need reminders to grab hold of our truth and spread our wings!!



  • Grey Mouser
    July 20, 2008
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    Hearing the caged bird singing again lifted in flight of freedom to what knowledge of truth has brought her. Wonderfully written with beauty in metaphor and imagery. Well done sweetheart, best to you.
    Love,

    xoxoxoxoxoxox
    Sun and stars shine no brighter than you!

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