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The Girl, Enigma

emotion

 

She says nothing of value,

but her tears are that of gold.

Her priceless emotions worn out by a bleeding heart.

 

No one could ever soothe her

or let her heart be still.

To those who know her the best,

she's quiet and her words are few.

 

Her escape is known to only her,

as if her secrets are her only true friends.

 

But if her secrets betray her,

who will be her friend then?

 

Author notes

Option/Pic Credit: 2.
http://fc02.deviantart.com/fs12/i/2006/265/6/b/Emotion_by_cerasum.jpg

Option one:
10 ENTRIES ALLOWED ONLY IN THIS OPTION!!!

Enter your favorite and BEST prewritten poem.
If there are already ten prewritten poems, don't enter one!
I don't want cliche people: you better re-read it and make sure it's good because from my previous contests I'm getting kind of sick of reading old stuff because you were too lazy to write something new. I know that seems harsh, but that's my point of view right now.

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"I love poetry!"

Lowercase Prelude
"Cut out my eyes so I can't see this cruel world hates me"

Option 4:
Enter your best prewrites
If you want to do this one you cant do the other ones unless you beg.

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • the evil angel
    August 16, 2008

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    I like the fact that you leave the ending open. You don't give us the answer, you make us think about it. I really like that. Now, you should really have a more even amount of lines. You have a lot of different amounts which can make it a bit confusing. In general, however, very well done. Good job


  • dendriapyro
    July 26, 2008
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    WOW

    This poem gave me goosebumps. Great write.


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    Quite the contests you have entered these in, all due at the same time, or pretty near. Great interpretation of this picture prompt. Creative ending two lines.


  • movedon
    July 23, 2008

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    Holy moly. Very well done here my brother. I think a lot of girls feel like this. But few have "tears of gold" as you put it. Very well done on the prompts. I see you've entered a lot of contests with this poem and I wish you nothing but luck with them.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • thearmsofsorrow
    July 22, 2008

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    ahh love the last two lines
    But if her secrets betray her,

    who will be her friend then?

    excellent stuff
    jolly good haha


  • Ravensdark
    July 22, 2008

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    I think you have done a good job with the picture prompt here. The last lines are pontent and memorable. The pain is etched write through. Thanks for the entry and good luck.

  • the evil angel
    July 21, 2008
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    I love it when they follow the rules! tee hee. will comment on the actual poem later


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 21, 2008

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    Wow i liked this alot. "But if her secrets betray her,
    who will be her friend then?" that was my favorite part thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly


  • penman gold member
    July 21, 2008
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    excellent

    Wonderful take on the picture. So very well done. Best of luck in the contests.

  • celadia
    July 21, 2008
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    I like this, it's very clever.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    July 20, 2008

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    If her secrets betray her who will be her friend then? So much emotion...so much sadness...Love the pic, the formatting rocks, and the meter and flow are phenomenal. ~mandie~


  • Mistress Masquerade
    July 20, 2008

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    I really like the entire thing, the last stanza is just WOW. Goo dluck my friend, this was am amazing write.


  • SoulfulBubbles
    July 20, 2008
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    ooo i really like this one

    thank you for entering

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