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You and I Are But A Memory

Oh, It Is Love

 

Love's chokehold had me held tight.

I was all you wanted and you were all I needed.

Life could not get to us, we were unstoppable,

 

or so it seemed.

 

How could this be?

That amongst the lovely memories of walking through parks

and dancing under the moonlight,

there is this empty space.

You left me broken and alone.

Call it cliche, if you want to.

This is how I feel, since you left me for a sweeter song.

 

If I could hold you in my arms again,

I would never let you go.

You were the sunrise to my sunset,

now I am sitting here in the dark.

 

 

Author notes

"Bags of Oranges Don't Leave Bruises"

Option/Pic Credit - Oh, It Is Love: http://little-pretty.deviantart.com/art/Oh-It-Is-Love-55313318

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  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    August 11, 2008

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    I just had to comment on this poem one more time. It's just such a stunning write! It was one of the first poems entered into my conest and it stayed at the top of my list all the way through till the end. =]

    Well now my contest has ended and congrats, I've given you the gold.

    x-Pretty-Odd-x <3


  • 2lullabyhaven
    August 7, 2008

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    Indescribably descriptive; Making memories shine all the more brighter, I found myself reaching for some of my own memories in reading this; thanks for sharing lol


  • movedon
    July 23, 2008

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    Tragically beautiful. But very well done. I liked this piece. Strong images and lapsing words. Well done.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • Mrs. C.
    July 23, 2008

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    really beautiful, love can be so amazing or utterly crule. i like how you ended about the sunrise to sunset now im in the dark.


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 21, 2008

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    Great poem my favorite part was when you said "You left me broken and alone.
    Call it cliche, if you want to.
    This is how I feel, since you left me for a sweeter song." I think that had the most meaning than any other line in the poem. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly


  • youhadme-athello.
    July 21, 2008
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    I really love the last two lines! Amazing job.


  • Xmas16
    July 21, 2008

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    A very good poem. I know how you feel in the sense of never having a chance with someone. But in the end, I know we will all find someone. Just a matter of time..


  • penman gold member
    July 21, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Another great write from you marvelous pen. Many blessings in the contest

  • She Stole My Voice
    July 20, 2008

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    "If I could hold you in my arms again,

    I would never let you go.

    You were the sunrise to my sunset,

    now I am sitting here in the dark. "

    This is fantastic.
    It's so heartbreaking and everyone who has ever had their heartbroken can relate.
    Thank you so much for entering and good luck.
    ♥


    ~Princess of Shadows~


  • LittleDecoy
    July 20, 2008

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    wow this was amazing.
    i'm still going through this & this poem helped.. knowing i'm not the only one who feels so alone in the situation.
    the last stanza was my favorite, it spoke to me the most.
    great poem!!! =)

  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    July 20, 2008
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    Purely amazing! Such a beautiful yet sad write, simply wonderful. It's very well written, Thank you for your entry. =]

  • limechic
    July 20, 2008

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    such beautiful poetry came out of this...the wording, the imagery, the picture (so cute...*sigh*) and i absolutely love the way you ended it....

    You were the sunrise to my sunset,
    now I am sitting here in the dark.

    ...but so well written!


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 20, 2008

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    Such a very very sad piece of writing this is. You see, that is the trouble with love, it hurts when you are in it, and hurts so damn much when you lose it. Your emotion really came through here. Such a heartfelt piece this is.

    Keep writing
    Dark Wishes
    Wayne Leon

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