Your words are dribble.
Truthless, unoriginal dribble.
Your insults are old and stale
Just like you.
Babies fresh from the womb are more educated.
And more creative at that.
And your appearance is repulsive.
Monkeys in a zoo flinging feces at each other
Are exponentially more attractive
Than you could ever even dream of being.
Some people should be locked in closets
Hidden away never to be seen
For the sake of other's vision.
You are one such person.
When I look at you,
Vomit is the least
Of the disgusting images brought to mind.
Your hands may strike me.
But my spirit is stronger
Than any physical strength you possess.
How can this be?
Because I found in my heart
The capability to love
Someone like you.
So I'm done.
Because I see now
That even from the start
You and this relationship
Possessed imminent failure.
And my farewell to you is this:
The lifeguards of the gene pool
Should have let you drown.
Author notes
I knew a guy like the one this contest is about. Moving on is the only option. This is my contribution to the contest. Congrats on getting rid of the jerk.
Now entered in another contest. This is option four. My AP name is Hirestel. "Cut out my eyes so I can't see this cruel world hates me"
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Comments
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WOW
I knew a guy just like this. Well written and emotional
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Wow. Just wow. I really think you laid it on him with this one. I can have some pretty creative insults, but you pretty much topped me. Hehe.
Little comment: it should be others' not other's. It is meant to be plural, otherwise it wouldn't make much sense. The second stanza could be broken up because it is kind of awkward to have about the same size for everything except for one stanza. And it's "imminent" not "immenent."
Your words cut deep. You're creative and witty and incredible with this. Well done. -
A nice rant of emotional heights. Thoughtful write. thank you for your entry!
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Ah..so much thoughtful end and so much edged poetry you brought here...I love this wonderful work...well done and my thanks for sharing it with me....
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Great poem it has such a great flow and was worded very well. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly -
"The lifeguards of the gene pool
Should have let you drown." hehe, Now that is the ultimate burn. crisp emotion, sassy comebacks, but yet theres a sensitive side that makes all of it come together soooo nicely....like banana cream pie...mmmmm
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funny
this was funny! i likes it.
haha gene pool.
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ahahah WOW this is so good!!! lol i'm a lifeguard myself and there have been so many times that i just want to let (or make?) people drown...shh dont tell...but that line was PERFECT to end it off! great job - i'm pretty sure you'll grab a trophy in this contest!!
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WOW i absolutely loved it you put your experience in this and it was great. I definetly will be considering you. Great job and oh yeah I knew a guy like this too and it made me just feel a little bit better. By the way my friend loved this.
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