Sun, stars and moon,
Oceans, seas and rivers,
Venus, Earth and Mars.
Intergalactic mysteries,
seen and unseen,
rivers of flame and light,
colliding asteriods creating rainbows;
soaring stars on a fanastical path.
Beauty, heat and power,
mesmerizing, calling for contemplation,
Absolute mysteries to petty mortals.
What can we create
in comparison to such wonder?
to such Mystic Splendour?
I could gaze into this abyss
of grace, splendour and charm
for more than eternity!
by: Nada Adel Sobhi
Author notes
I hope this poem makes sense to you. It is what this stunning picture inspired me to write, and here is its link: http://i286.photobucket.com/albums/ll84/NooNi_NightStar/Fantasy%20and%20other%20pix/815.jpg
It is rather fragmentary.. but oh well.. i just hope it is coherent.
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very mystical indeed. great work. you've got a 4 for this poem bringing you to a 64. thanks for entering and best of luck to you.kahy
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Good Work
I liked the poem. Thank you for entering.
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Thankyou for taking part
I hope you enjoy the contest
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Rhythm Child
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Personally, you could do without the first stanza as it merely lists various (though interrelated) objects. After that, this piece is very descriptive with some lovely imagery. Best of luck!
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well done
You paint a lovely picture of the world around us
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Composed in utter awh...of the visions life shows. Beautiful moving inspiration for the reader.
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