I look at you with eyes so bright
I play with you on very cold night's
I'm here with you when you cry
when your sad and lonely im your number one guy
when you leave i just dont know what to do
but when you come back my soul is anew
Im so glad that you chose me
because when i'm in your arms i feel like family
why you sleep im there beside you
home me tight as i guide you
day by day its like i'm in heaven
you and me together is like happiness times seven
i love you more than i can stand
I will follow your every command
I will be here to the very end
Because you are my one and only friend
Author notes
This my very first poem... that has rhyming so.... i hope you like it
by the way this is in my dogs p.o.v.
A contest entry
- For the group{ A group for animal lovers } Title Animals and how they help you when you are sick by storiesuntold.
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Comments
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ahhh this is an adorable write about a teddy bears love. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering this into my contest.
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PS Please be sure you are a member of the Group " Friends Dont Let Friends Wander Alone In The Ap' thank you
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This is really good and I like the rhyming as well. but I am asking for a made up character. Please reenter with an imaginitave creature that you made up. thank you. Once again, great piece.
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i like it, nice work
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Good job Sis!
I like it!
lol
It is cute!
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i liked it i dont like to ryhme myself cuz i always feel kinda childish for some reason i dont realy like my own poetry at all but thats off topic...i like the way you did it from his point of view i think it would be cool if you did another one from ur p.o.v. like a reply or somthing u know...
with luvies
sammi
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When did you write this? How old were you. It's so cute. Aw, I want to give you a hug, now.
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ITS SO CUTE XD i love it the rhyming ish perfect and in tune you kepth with the flow and i loved it all so true the only problems now ish for the rest fo the day i will be rhyming to
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nice write, best of luck in the contest
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guilty
that was a very great write the best poem i have read, great job :-)
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It rhymes well
A warm and embracing write, and for Someone close to read this poem, they would truly have to feel like they are in heaven. I won't go into the mistakes
( Read comment from storiesuntold again ) here, so just as a poem on it's own, you did well and good luck in the contest. -
Wel l done
I am so pleased you have entered my contest and I found your poem very refreshing .Good rhyme here and you keep writing more every day . -
Good write here
A lot of love and it had great rhymn If you dont mind I will help you in a few places before I jude
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I play with{you} on very cold nights
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when you leave I just don't {know} what to do
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I'm so glad that you {chose} me
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because when I'm in your arms I feel like family
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while you sleep I'm there beside you
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hold me tight as I guide you
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because you are my one and only friend
If you can get those lines corrected I will come back and read again and comment OK
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What a cute poem, and it rhymed pretty well. Oh, I know storiesuntold! she's my grandma on ap! :3 such a small world, I say good luck to thee! Keep on writing my friend!
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Well written, and this contest is actually being held by a good friend of mine. Its definitely a small world. Good writing skills expressed here. Great luck!
Silvos.
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