The brittle grass waves in the summer breeze
While shades of clouds pass over aimlessly.
This atmosphere is warm, but can't appease
My wants. I wait and walk in misery!
For I have lost my love, my lord, King Zel.
I waited for him then. I'm waiting still,
Although life left him even as he fell.
He sleeps at the heart of Silbury Hill!
But now the hill's foundations shake,
In answer to the centuries cried.
With Silbury's fall, King Zel will awake
And, as he vowed, I'll be his bride.
For once men discover and stir the heart,
Cursed Silbury Hill will crumble apart!
Author notes
photo by Tom Goskar
Want to know more about Silbury Hill?
http://www.sacred-destinations.com/england/silbury-hill.htm
http://www.stonepages.com/england/silburyhill.html
This poem has been posted in The Blue Fog Journal:
http://bluefogjournal.com/2008/07/wake-up-king-zel-by-ida-duplantier/
A contest entry
- Rhyme - Sonnet, Villanelle, or Pantoum only. by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended July 31, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wonderful poem and lovely picture too.
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very nice write..u seem to be a talented poet..should read more of ur poem
i like it..its like a crossing time love..over ages...very nice piece -
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no. It's not a lost love poem since it specifically says that there's a "happy ending". I do not like love poems or lost love poems as a rule, but this one isn't a sappy love poem (which almost all of them are), and I can tolerate quasi love poems, which is really what this is. It's really not badly done either.
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Thank you.
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Ah, neat and nifty stuff, no question, although far from your best... bravo... bravo.. bravo...
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You know, people always seem to say that about the ones I put the most time and effort into.
Maybe I shouldn't try so hard.
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Outstanding
I'll probably enter this contest as well but will have trouble matching the quality of this poem. I loved the whole concept and the rhyme is sophisticated and subtle. You seem to go from strength to strength. Best of luck in the contest.
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