Random occurrences of life lessons shape edges of tattered realities.
Trapped in a mundane existence forever accepting, never creating.
Never given a choice, constantly controlled by miscellaneous circumstances.
Words echo deeply of fate and missed chances. Follow, do and think as you’re told.
Urging me to ignore the dinging of thoughts ringing loudly in MY own head.
Beliefs bent to the will of others. Desires buried deep, dying for release.
How can you tell me that MY dreams are foolish, meaningless never to be?
Born of a fantasy that can never be realized, materialized, never to rise.
What do you know Mr. Stagnant Oppressor? Smashing away at my consciousness.
Preying on fears residing deep in MY heart to further your own personal, selfish gain.
Damn you for painting MY world as a con, a cheap imitation, a desperate mirage.
Take down that ego and move to the side.
If your thoughts are real then Mr., so are Mine!
A contest entry
- ...Our Thoughts Change Water... by Desire.
700 points, ended July 25, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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oooh. i like the phsrae 'a desperate mirage.'
great beat to it. congratulations on your trophie.
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a strong poem
very well penned
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Such a riveting poem of a life filled with mundane and monotonous commands and seems to never satisfy...beautifully written poem, poet...
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wow powerful and chilled me to the bone!
I feel such way.. ppl like to crush our precious dreams and visions jsut b/c they dont have anything else to do... nicely done! tottaly deserved more than HM on my point on view
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one's thoughts are reality. it is a daily chore smashing through the background that has been accumulated thru the years to see the true world, the one full of possibilities.
thanks and congrats on the honorable.
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AMEN!!!! This is such a truly powerful piece of expression! The audacity of some people just leave me wondering ... Men especially lol! This is very well spoken, with a great intensity about it! Excellent piece!
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very real. well done
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OOOh... I like this
awesome job indeed.
Congrats on your trophy.
Delila
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Awesome work here my friend!
Congrats on your trophy and good
luck to you in all that you do!
A really enjoyable write and
thanks for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826
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Ooh. Great job. I especially love those last two lines. Very powerful. Congrats on your HM.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Today's Poem: 10/13/2008
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Nice job. Although the style is not one that I am familiar with, the thoughts are clear and well presented. My favorite lines were:
Preying on fears residing deep in MY heart to further your own personal, selfish gain.
Damn you for painting MY world as a con, a cheap imitation, a desperate mirage.
Take down that ego and move to the side.
If your thoughts are real then Mr., so are Mine!
Great job.
Mike
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: My Reality
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ I was pulled to the words: Mr. Stagnant Oppressor also the line: Damn you for painting MY world as a con, a cheap imitation, a desperate mirage- and how I imagine what children hear growing up when they have created the ultimate design- that came from within and have it torn down with an adult bulldozer of words whether metaphor or symbolism Love the last line also for Empowerment just dripped from Your words and interestingly enough I am being shown David and Goliath- whether metaphor or symbolism
Getting reference to the Spirit- being the stone in slingshot-
Hopefully that makes some sense...
Excellent take on the prompt in ten lines (more or less) ~
Powerful images & message You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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