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The Bomb Children

Maybe play doh was an excuse for finding the inner children
that die with war in their eyes

Country men fall in nightmares of
what the storm said - countrymen dead

"did I kill, - did I kill, - did I kill some of your people?"


Murder sweeps streets, ash soaks eyes
and hurricanes become bombs

War agendas become suicide machines 


Roll call, death calls a litany for the slaughtering tribe

Author notes

This has NO RACIST OR STEREOTYPICAL INTENT, BUT

It's emphatic to read the line,


"did I kill, - did I kill, - did I kill some of your people?"


with an ARABIC accent to give the perception of a terrorist.

The line is also a quote from the musician, Wumpscut, so I give full credit to him.

Now that we have any potential racism sorted out. <3

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  • Desire gold member
    July 25, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: The Bomb Children
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ I do understand what You speak of and the notes in the AC- for some reason after I read from beginning to end- I kept being shown how the clothes- whether worn loose like robes or closer to body- underneath still lies a living- breathing person- that could be in the scenario of seeing-experiencing- streets swept by murder and coming eye to eye with ash soaken orbs- I'm being shown how the Mind- victimized by scenes played out on the stage- all the characters are real- with bios- with special effects *felt* - emotions not exaggerated- or made to look authentic- I'm being shown the impact after the bomb dropped-
    naked children running through the streets- with skin singed- and real cries- whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully that makes some sense...
    Excellent take on the prompt in ten lines (more or less) ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~