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I Win

I lose myself every time

darkness drapes this excuse of life;

Puzzles of promises litter

across my heart all fake, broken.

.

Screams muffled with forced thrusts; slowly

I lose myself every time,

yet when I pick up a pen the

drape slips a little releasing

.

My nightmares and allowing me

to move away from my deep shell.

I lose myself every time

the mirror reflects back haunted

.

But slowly parchment becomes my

closest friend, holding me dear and

wiping my tears; happy but still

I lose myself every time

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Title changed at Jeffro's suggestion ♥

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  • Maddogk
    July 27
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    correction

    .....In this you have become a mistress.........

  • Maddogk
    July 27

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    My friend.....

    That
    Darkness draping the soul; keeping us under total control -
    Yet,
    The flowing ink of thought can contort this demented slice of life into a place of pure ecstacy,
    not only in an emotional sense but also in a physical form of spirituality. [I call this PARADISE...LMAO]
    You have reached this point and are able to express it beautifully... and the best form of expression is in the form of ink [blood sweat and tears too!]
    We all need a conection to our soul and we all have the ability to excel.

    In this you have a mistress, as far as I am concerned...

    Well done..

    All my love to you..
    Jeffro


  • Desire gold member
    July 26

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    Precious~

    This is one Gorgeous piece You have penned with Power and the words tug at the Heart
    Love the form which I have never tried but want to give it a whirl
    Like that saying- the pen is mightier than the sword
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • maralisa silver member
    July 25

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    But slowly parchment becomes my closest friend, holding me dear and wiping my tears; happy but still I lose myself every time a wonderful poem I to can relate to the last staza brilliant good luck in the contest


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    July 24

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    WOW

    A lovely quatern my loving wife.
    You have captured so well what many surviors have felt.
    "I lose myself every time"
    I believe we all feel this way from time to time. For me it's most everyday.
    Brilliant piece
    I wish you the very best in the contest
    Your hubby




  • UnityHope gold member
    July 20
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    wow....


  • Valley Girl silver member
    July 20

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    Hun! This is such a painful and realistic write that happens far too often. I truly feel that people who have had to experience this cruelty are the strongest survivors in the world. You have really brought this poem to life. (hugs) ♥


  • DolphinLass silver member
    July 20
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    wow very emotion filled write


  • guardian angel
    July 20

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    Beautifully written, deep, intense and yet there is a subtle edge to your ability to get through anything, no matter what. There is always an outlet - we just have to find it. well written

    . Rewarded 4

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