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the same poem

    

    

the same poem

the same poem

over and over again

finding so many different ways

to keep saying the same thing

 

I

is where it all begins –

[where else?]

the view from here

where the first person sits

would be a panorama –

three-sixty degrees of fullness

but the observer is focussed

all concentration

all mind,

each thought

each waking moment

every particle of consciousness

directs itself away from here

what is a being so annihilated

so unaware of self

so core-less

so attenuated of personality

empty –

unless something fills

 

 Love

now we begin to see –

a light  in the empty heart

a warmth in the nothingness

healing for all broken things

ease of lonely agony

passion replacing fear

a sense of completeness

this thing is magical

making enchanted connections

this thing is magnetic

seeking the opposite pole

this thing is all-consuming

and has eaten away self

abolished

replaced

re-made

 

 You

at the centre of it all

where the eye looks

where all senses aim

where every sensation is

where each nerve ends

the meaning

the reason

the philosophy

the faith,

the coherence of life

the turning of the world

the wheeling of galaxies

a myriad of blinding suns –

but

at the ending of it all

to blessed wonderment –

a woman

a girl

 

the same poem

the same poem

over and over again

finding so many different ways

to keep saying the same thing

merely

only

I love you

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

This is actually an early poem of mine, written 18th May 2005, but which I haven't posted before. It is all about writing love poetry. Sorry it is longer than you wanted.

Prompt: "I love you"...is a universal phrase being said by the all living beings...Unknown


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  • Oraculus
    July 30, 2008
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    Palpable

    It sounds as if you needed a vacation at that time; lol... DW


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 20, 2008

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    humm..same yet formed in a new mindset..beautiful indeed.........well done..and my thanks for sharing such a wonderful piece ...

  • Bad Bill
    July 20, 2008
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    This is good. I particularly like the way you've structured this.

    Cheers,
    Bill

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      July 20, 2008
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      It's a very "young" poem from my point of view, Bill. I had only been writing poetry a matter of a couple of months when I composed this. It's rather immature. I am glad you like it.


  • FransB gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    Whether the same or not

    this poem like no other is fresh - not in the words or thoughts, but in the writing thereof, just above the 'feeling', as it is from here that such words can flow. Frans


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    Some people have noticed I sometimes write a love poem, and yes they are all just different ways to write exactly the same poem.

    great stuff, "not bad" in fact.

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