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Forever in the Chords

At first it just was.

It was just music.

I was just me.

We all just were.

 

I sat and played,

music was my life.

Each note was me.

I placed myself

into every chord,

every measure,

every song.

 

I didn't notice,

not a first.

Change was slow;

snail-like or turtle.

 

I spent more time

in musical dreams,

than I did in reality.

The actuality of it

never grasped me.

 

I sat upon my place,

This piano bench;

it had become my home.

I sought to write

a masterpiece.

I'd not leave...

Not until I finished.

 

My fingers flailed

upon these keys.

Black and white-

all I'd come to know.

The notes flowed

smoothly with grace.

In a happening so

very much at once.

I faded off and away;

out into oblivion.

 

I was the music.

Pieces of me

danced about.

Spinning, singing.

Drifting away;

away from myself.

Becoming another,

different being.

 

The music still rang;

fueled by my being.

My masterpiece

still rang aloud.

It was finishing itself,

through the use of me.

I was my music.

 

At last it was done;

I was finished.

All that remained

was sheet-music.

My air-born music

crumbled like ash.

 

All I could be,

was what was left;

sheet-music.

Until someone played

and set me free.

I was trapped.

Forever in the chords.

Author notes

http://spokojnysen.deviantart.com/art/concert-87552823
^Photo Prompt^

Well, the way I wrote this one. I sort of pictured the black wisps as parts of music in the air. Then it all makes a bit more sense.

Once I made the decision I just ran with it. I hope you enjoy this one. '

 

Starlight-Owl

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  • skye01 gold member
    March 28

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    Excellent, We are all vibrations and to be able to leave your body with each note is a wonderful thing.


  • reckless abandon
    September 6, 2008
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    Music can be an amazing thing. Thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest.


  • sailor ptolema
    July 21, 2008

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    Ok; logistics:

    left-align. It will look cleaner.

    Also; get rid of all the commas and periods; i felt like it was stop-and-go-and-robotic, It really hinders the piece.

    "The music still rang;
    fueled by my being.
    My masterpiece
    still rang aloud.
    It was finishing itself,
    through the use of me.
    I was my music.">>>>>>I don't really like this stanza... i think you can clean it up some.

    you also use 'sheet-music' too close together for my liking.

    This was a decent effort . I like the way it ends very much.

    thank you for entering and g'luck.

    ~Pt


  • notorious
    July 21, 2008

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    I don't know why, but I'm not a fan of poems being centered when they're long OR of...so many periods ending sentences.

    I do fancy your title--it's musical & ethereal.

    "sheet-music."
    There really shouldn't be a hyphen here.

    "Then obvious changes
    happened at once."
    I can't help but feel SAYING that obvious changes are occurring, you're ruining the effect by narrating unnecessarily. You don't need to tell us that obvious changes are happening, BUT you can tell us what those obvious changes are, you know?

    "through the use of me."<--Like this.

    Thanks for entering (:


  • Flare the Arcphoenix
    July 20, 2008
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    We aren't even, but I need to steal a quote from you.

    ...Wow.

    Awesomeness!! There isn't much else to describe it...words fail me now. Music flows through us all - it's in the blood. Only some us choose to use it as a muse for greatness. (You can steal that one. I like the quote!)

    Excellent..!

    --Flare
    o}--{=======>


  • sailor ptolema
    July 20, 2008
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    http://spokojnysen.deviantart.com/art/concert-87552823

    if you'd like another; let me know


    • notorious
      July 21, 2008
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      LOVIN' that pic..reminds me of the one I gave Cannons, but more...b&w

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