Rain comes down,
mimmicking tears,
i’ve put up with this,
for too many years,
i’m in a cannibal mindset,
divided,
by common sense,
hypocricy,
thy name is me,
still trying to fill,
the empty seat,
bless everyone,
for not saying it,
tearing me down,
and i can’t get around it,
[chorus]
What’s happened to me?
i can no longer see,
what i tried to build,
was never fulfilled,
what’s happened to me?
it’s probably easy,
ya, it’s easy
it’s occam’s razor.
criminal minds,
too many times,
i wish you could see,
all these things that i dream,
but for some reason i,
dont seem to realise,
that you don’t either,
incomprehensible fact,
that what we lacked is,
too much for either of us,
to handle…
[chorus]
genius stupidity,
our inability,
to connect,
waht is next?
how many times,
can i be told relax,
photos of you,
holding my hand,
i cant understand,
still to this day…
[chorus]
do thunder claps,
still make a sound,
when using one hand,
or are they duelly bound?
because it sounds the same,
when alone in bliss,
then when i’m with her,
is it time to end this?
[chorus] (fades)
A contest entry
- Rain. Rain. Rain. by rosie4491.
450 points, ended August 7, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Searching by crivanea.
300 points, ended August 5, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do ya think?
Comments
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hmm..i see that this was used in the rain contest..this is a nice piece..not very creatie or orginal...and not right for my contest..but as for the poem itself..i believe u have potential to write a more unqiue poem than this..this def. have emotion..ut perhaps instead of feeling..show more...tell less..but anyways..nice job and good luck in the contest
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Interesting piece. The spelling is a little distracting. I don't think it's quite right for my contest but it's a good write. Best of luck.
Keep it up =] -
showing the truths of life through the rain is a magic which you did.........well done..and my thanks for sharing such a heartfelt piece ...
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