The icey drops fill the sky
Washing the colour away
Falling down to Earth
They turn the whole world grey.
A world of black and white
Makes it so much harder to see,
But in the midst there is a speck,
That little red speck is me.
As the red drains from my heart,
covering every surface near,
That little red speck from the sky,
Becomes all the time more clear.
But as the waves become a lake,
And the lake transforms to river,
The red is washed away,
As it trickles from the sliver.
And the icey drops fill the sky,
They wash the colour away
And as they fall down to Earth,
The world returns to grey.
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Username: Love.Dream.Believe.
A contest entry
- ::..I'm Drowning, but There's No Water..:: by PoetryDove.
1050 points, ended August 4, 2008, 15 entries
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Beautiful. Your poetry improves every time I log on. Well done!!!
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I love the beauriful imagery and the flow was excellent! I love nature so this was one of my favourite pieces.
I like how the poem seems to have a good effect with the grey returning towards the end. The rhyme was fantastic too. I nearly didn't even realize it.
Good luck in the contest!!
loveees,
transit~
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the most amazing alliteration I believe I have ever felt, let alone ever read!
take care always,
~pithyAplomB.
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HEY YOU
I loved this loads and loads. there is so much in this piece that stands out; but I love how you weaves a story in your brillaintly penned verses. your rhyme is wonderful- one of the best I have seen so far
love this:
A world of black and white
Makes it so much harder to see,
But in the midst there is a speck,
That little red speck is me.
wow. this is a great piece. I LOVE IT!!! 
keep penning and best of lucks in the contest 
MUCH LOVE,
char!
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ooh i like the rhyme in this, it was interesting! the choice of words is good here, the metaphors are lovely too! the flow is awesome, as this poem tells a story! keep penning, thanks for the entry, and wishing you all the best! >.<
~beauty of silence
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Thanks for the entry!
I love the third stanza the best.
It's amazing.
The rhyming is great and I do love the scheme.
It's awesome.
And, thanks again for entering.
sarah ~
p.s. sorry it took forever for me to comment -_- -
since you're one of my AP sisters I figured I had better read some more of your amazing poetry and I must say I love this poem! The rhyme is beautiful and seems as though it was effortless. I would pick a few favorite lines from this but I can't because they are all so good!!
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I liked this alot.
It flows well and my favourite part is the beginning/ending stanza.
Good luck in the contest.
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