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aromatic candles
a table laid for just two
great expectations


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aromatic candles
a table set for two
honeymoon hotel

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  • grannyeri gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    Like taking part in these workshops as the guidance and help given certainly improves our writing abilities. Wishing you well in this contest workshop.


  • azure85 gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    aromatic candles
    table laid for just two
    great expectations

    This is very romantic, the only line I would suggest you change is L3. The scene is set, and that is a given. Can you give an image to bring this out?

    aromatic candles
    on table set for two
    ......

    Oh, what happens! So much possibility with this lovely beginning.


  • albymyheart gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    The scene is set and you have done it with so few words. This is a wonderful Haiku and the last line says so much...alby