he controls my every move
my thoughts towards him are changing me
i take a sip
the water flows through me like the energy i never used to have
my thoughts are transforming the water into a power
my thoughts are transforming me
they are giving me a hidden strenght to fight back
my thoughts have helped me transform my life
I can break free from him
I control my own moves because I'm free
my thoughts have given me freedom.
Author notes
recognition to photobucket for the use of the picture as inspiration to my writing.
A contest entry
- ...Our Thoughts Change Water... by Desire.
700 points, ended July 25, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: freedom thoughts
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ Love the phrase: i take a sip- for some reason when I was reading that line- I felt a whole new door to the Mind open- some people are afraid to drink the *water* so to speak especially from a foreign place- just imagine a traveler in a foreign land- told to not drink the water because the body is not acclimated to the particles- I'm being shown similar here where new ideas- images-perceptions from unfamiliar sources can take some getting used to- but if the Mind takes a sip- Miracles can happen- whether metaphor or symbolism
Hopefully that makes some sense...
Excellent take on the prompt in ten lines (more or less) ~
Powerful images & message You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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this is really impacting as we do control ourselves and with the power within can achieve anything. Well done
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Wonderful..loved this special flow..
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