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A Heat wave

the splash of footsteps
poured a heatwave on new day
a sun's eyes opened

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Saddie23
form: haiku
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  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 22, 2008

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    Thank you for your Haiku:

    the splash of footsteps
    poured a heatwave on new day
    a sun's eyes opened

    Well-expressed.
    It can be interpreted in more than one way.

    Thanks again.

    Harrisham Minhas

    • saddie23
      July 22, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for the wonderful comments given and the applaudes given to my ku. Saddie23


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    I'm no expert but this appears to fit all the rules and be a lovely poem with it

    All the best

    Jeff

    • saddie23
      July 20, 2008
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      thank u

      thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my ku. Saddie23


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    July 20, 2008

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    Wow. I love the first line, the way it opened the poem and rolled perfectly along with the second and final line.
    An amazing and beautiful Haiku!

    Best of luck
    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda

    • saddie23
      July 20, 2008
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      thank u

      Thank u for responding to my ku and liking my lines. this means alot to me that I followed the rules and praises given to my ku. Saddie23

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