Memories, opportunities divested,
thrown away like rubbish
in a trashcan
overflowed, blew freely about
a dull, monochromatic urban
canyon of despair
as another soul cried out
in quiet desperation
like a subject
banished.
Author notes
Prompt/picture #4
A contest entry
- The Prompt Coffee House: Prompt Challenge Round 1: Picture Prompts by Ceridwens Soul.
1050 points, ended August 4, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Even in the most crowded room a person cn be totally alone, this piece sums that up.
'monochromatic urban
canyon of despair'
superb imagery, well done!
Thank you for sharing with us
Jem and Ju
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I really felt the emotion in this poem. Excellent phrasings...."monochromatic canyon of despair".....what an evocative phrase. Very well done, and worthy of a bookmark.
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I feel the quiet desperation you speak of at times, in the grocery store as we all pass each other close enough to touch but still miles away...we wrap ourselves in our pain to the point where we don't know how not, or how to reach out...that what I got from the words and the piture you wrote from, anyway...GOOD LUCK!!!
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You captured the desolation of being alone in your own unique way.
Best of luck in the contest dear.
Love Margaret
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Thank you for your entry, good luck
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Made me want to know what memories and opportunities she had thrown away.
You've captured this picture in your unique way that really makes the reader think. And as always with your brilliant style!
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brilliant
"a dull, monochromatic urban
canyon of despair..."
curious, appealing words that have some real power. congrats and best regards...
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I have read other entries in this contest and I must say I do like where you took the prompt. A sad outlook on our society. Juls
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Bittersweet memories...
This poem is a brilliantly captured portrait of our lives. Very well done... Wishing you all the best in this contest, Poet!!! Peace, Cyn
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The title and contest compliment each other perfectly. This is lovely, meaningful poetry, something we can all identify with.
~ Nicolette
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