You keep your God
Locked in a box
You lost the key
You keep your God
Locked in a box
You want no key
You shall not be free
You keep your God
Locked in a box
There was no key
You were always Free
Author notes
Very first experimental attempt at a (haiku) senyru-style poem
Written October 7th, 2003
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Hood Winked!!
This has a depth and wisdom Truth is what we search for some never find it. The way to truth comes from within and the key is ours to unlock...We are the ones who keep the lock shut the ending so wise and when we reach the truth we do indeed become free like it has always been .. we just had to learn. Very inspirational. Thank you
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Hood-Winked!
Congratulations, dear Poet, on being ambushed by the Poetic Bandits!
I truly hope this mass visitation brings a smile to your face and a renewed confidence to your work. 
Wow...this is so profound...written in a very intelligent and concise way. I bow in awe!
Loved every word in every line.
BRAVO, dear Poet!
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Wow..I found your first one..that's awesome...This was so so deep and profound. I should give this to mom
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this poem resonates with TRUTH.
what else can be said ?
thank you ...
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Thank you for your insight, Peaseeker.
The rigid religionists inspired this...those who wouldn't recognize who they claim to serve if He really walked in door! Dogma is the 'box' they have locked themselves in. Anything that doesn't fit their preconceived beliefs is rejected.
When we see "that God cannot be contained, we see that in ourselves." Amen!
Love & Light
~ Maatkara
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Brava!
This statement is so clear and forceful and true to my understanding, I stand up and shout, Brava!! The repeated lines accuse the reader of hypocrisy, for if God - could - be locked in a box, why would they let him out? In seeing that God cannot be contained, we see the same thing in ourselves. -
Excellent
Hi Ma'at-ka-ra:
That is a very deep work. Many people talk but don't do, many people say but won't do while other practice what they preach. You are a very insightful person into what we call the human race. This is my take on what you have said and I commend you on saying it so simply. Thanks, it was a nice read. Bill -
Thank you! I put the question mark as it may not quite make either category, but psuedo senyru will do,
When I wrote it (3 months ago), I didn't even know about 'senyru', or whether a 'set of three' was even acceptable. Just 'flying by the seat of my pants', you could say. LOL! ~ Maatkara 
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Huh...This is an interesting topic, and a very unique take on it. I would go with senyru more than haiku since it isn't exactly a nature theme. I love your stuff, and this is different from what I usually see. Thanks for sharing.
Edited on Jan 08, 5:42 because ''.
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