I stare with wonder
as your smile deepens
I concentrate
on uneven teeth
and messy hair.
I've seen you
in mornings
I've seen you
in bathrooms
not exactly
what I had hoped for
in a future man
yet, my eyes
brighten
with your company
your uneven teeth steal
my anguish
your messy hair holds
my soul
and your humor soothes
a, once, aching heart
Finally, I've touched the truth
perfection has a new meaning
but, it looked nothing like you
Author notes
dedicated to my boyfriend 4 years...YIKES!!! lol
Prompt: "Perfection looks nothing like you"
A contest entry
- Allure by notorious.
473 points, ended July 21, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very good.
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Awwww...
This is such a wonderful and touching write
Sounds like you are happy with your boyfriend and that's all that matters. Well penned indeed 
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Can you add "ill-tempered at times" in somewhere? You've given hope to legions of us ordinary-looking fellows!
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lol ...I may have
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You know.. I love people's quirks... like an uneven smile or a crooked tooth.. those things can be so endearing! And I think this is just lovely! Someone what we least expected to fall for... we do!
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LMAO!!
"not exactly what I had hoped for in a future man"
LoL...but that doesn't seem to matter now, huh?
Hilarious & unique write...thanks for entering. -
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No...now i am stuck with him...J/K lol. It's just funny how I pictured my prince charming when i was a young girl. but all the guys that fit that picture were just ugly inside. Tho not saying my boyfriend is ugly...lol. he's cute but i imagined the whole tall, dark and hansome...he is tall, blonde, adorable...lol.
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