It should be criminal to walk through life with a mask
always unable show your inner-self
It should be criminal hiding who I am
at time just wanting to turn yourself in
It should be criminal pressing the blade to my skin
holding my breath, unable to let anyone in
It should be criminal for holding all the pain in
tearing myself up deep within
It shold be criminal wishing for death
Hoping that this would be my last day
It should be criminal acting upon every impulse
Ending everything
It should be criminal to end up in heaven
Even after everything I did
Author notes
umm i was just really mad!
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at time just wanting to turn yourself in
that should be:
at times just wanting to turn yourself in
shold >> should
apart from that i really enjoyed reading this poem, It is true it should be criminal yes but everybody feels it at some point. all my love
kitty xxx -
Loved it, let the anger flow. Its well constructed and even more well written.
Glad this was my "return the favor,"
Silvos.
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Ooh you must have! this are dangerous thoughts. Dangerous but Great!!!
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Criminally insane
We all would be criminals if we let our emotions get the better of us. It shows the madness you were feeling when you wrote this, it doesn't flow as well as it should but still it's a good write. -
im glad its not criminal, cause if it was i would be in big trouble with the law
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I like it. For some reason, I like it. I'm not sure why, though. I have my period, so the loss of blood is making me stupid.
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