Seems I always
buy a ticket
for the merry-go-round
even though
my arms are too short
to grasp the brass ring
without falling from my painted pony
A contest entry
- Back to Where I was...... by the tempest.
475 points, ended July 27, 2008, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS TWO by Swan song.
1200 points, ended September 20, 2008, 41 entries
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This is really lovely Bella.
my comment is going to sound terrible, but I really mean it in the best way...
It takes something so innocent, and so hopeful, (the merry-go-round) and turns it into a realist's metaphor for love. At least that's my take on it.
At the same time, there's a kind of hope to it as well... that you keep getting on, knowing full well where you'll end up. I can really identify.
I also love it's very succinct and punchy style, not a spare word to be found, not an overstatement in sight.
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Very beautiful I like this approach and i enjoyed very much thank you for entering!
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awwww!!!! i love this!! it been so long since i rode on one of those painted pony...this is just beautiful..perfect..a lovely snapshot of childhood..congrat on the gold..u deserved it!
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Painted poinies are worth the trip in themselves. Life is but an adventure besides we could grow taller over night =) love this it is what we women do.
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loved this...sarcastic and smart!
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Wonderful
Very creative and well expressed. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Interesting contemplation. If the brass ring is not to be had, one promoted purpose of the circular ride, (ending where you began) is nullified.
Since you persist in ticket purchases, perhaps your personal enjoyment is found in some other feature of the ride? The close-up of beautiful and fantastic animals in their brilliant colors and bejewelled harnesses or the pleasure of the company of enjoyed companions?
Beautiful inclusion of all my highlights and memory triggers in this brief write..."Carousel," "ticket," "merry-go-round," "brass ring," and "painted pony."
Thank you for a bright field trip to those memories!
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So Cute
This is just precious. The good old merry-go-round. Those special childhood memories are ever so sweet, at least these ones. Thank you for sharing with me.
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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