The fury returns!
Sanity reveals its ugly face
And shows how things really are.
I've been stabbed, mortally wounded.
And don't know whether
To press on or seek help.
My stunned body feels only the sickness
Cannot register the pain.
I know not how to feel,
So I run.
Running into the nothing
For reasons yet unknown.
A voice inside mocks my failure.
Destroy the voice! Kill it!
Conquer it with vain success!
Eliminate the past and threaten the future!
Ruler of the moment,
I stand alone,
I stand ready,
Tensed for the next move...
...falling.
Author notes
Sometimes you get fooled by your surroundings. And when a particularly powerful revelation hits you, it's hard to react to and things tend to fall apart. I've had these moments and it's almost like going insane. You don't know what's left to trust and it feels like its you versus the world and all its darkness.
For contest:
"Cadaver Cafe: Special Today- GraveRobber Goulash"
A contest entry
- ChiLdReN oF ThE KoRn by Poetic Obscenity.
550 points, ended July 25, 2008, 29 entries
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What say you?
Comments
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I could pick out a few cliche lines in this,
Actually I'm really bored so I'm going to:
"Running into the nothing"
and
"For reasons yet unknown"
Not that many, but cliche lines can make an amazing poem total crap.
The title, is nonetheless attention-seeking,
(that may actually be what you want for a poem)
I think the 3 periods in from of 'falling' are pointless
We get the idea that there's a pause after the line before that
It was decent -
Bravo!
This is definitly a piece to be competing with. The way your words flow ...is like music to my ears. Wonderful job.
Thank you for your entry and good luck.
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