I see nothing for unborn eyes,
To relish in delight…
In a world where revulsion wins…
The preachers sin in silence,
And violence beats the pacifist to death.
I feel nothing for unborn hearts,
To touch with wonder...
With the exception of resentful wasters;
Those that lag behind,
With scorns and frowns and ignorant but downs…
Oh aye…. I see nothing here,
For my unborn Seed
A contest entry
- Best Prewrites From July 2008 by amaranthine lover.
2800 points, ended November 18, 2008, 37 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A wonderful and controversial piece!
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thank you for gold
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you write well...with great thoughts...
'unborn eyes' is a unique expression and provides food for thought.
You have said a lot in a few words and I like the way you express the thoughts in vivid language and heartfelt emotion.
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thank you means a lot
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ditto.
bravo.
i love it, like always with your poems, you write things i can only wish to. great job.
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thank you, and promise me you'll always keep writing
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Wow
In a world where revulsion wins…
The preachers sin in silence,
And violence beats the pacifist to death.
This is my favorite stanza...I like the meter and flow of this piece very much. You are a good writer and this poem has a unique message. Good write.
~mandie~
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thanks Mandie
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