Raise the anchor, set the sail ...
lest the wind begin to fail.
The night is long, the way obscure:
pain and sorrow, naught can cure.
Still we struggle, still we strive,
still we fight to stay alive.
In truth, this world of doubt and fears
is aptly named a "Veil of Tears."
Happiness will seldom bring
more than balm to ease the sting.
Sorrow seems to blight our souls,
quench our striving, dim our goals.
Has Fate a trick to play upon us?
What sayest thou, naive Adonis?
Read thy palm or scry thy fate,
Death comes soon, or Death comes late.
What matters most to thee ... and me ...
won't change, or mar, Eternity.
Author notes
As Gandalf said, it's easiest to speak to the wisest. It cuts down on long explanations required by the young.
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 7 Old - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended August 15, 2008, 36 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hoodwinked !
This is a thoughtful write, well constructed and worded. Good flow and rhyme make this a delight to read and ponder. Very elegant and polished.
You have been Hoodwinked today by the Poetic Bandits because WE CARE!
Dennis
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Very good as usual. Well done Rhyme and flow very good.
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Perfectly flowed and rhymed, save a slight gripe about the feminine rhyme in the penultimate stanza. An "HM plus" so we'll be sending you another 100 points.
It is always a joy to read your entries. Great stuff
Jeff and Sue.
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Nice. Smooth and elegant rhyming to match powerfully wielded vocabulary. I enjoyed the second stanza the most by far, but the ending was also quite good. Well writ!
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Magnificently composed and elabrorately devised piece of true poetry. Kudos and a winner hands down!
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This harks me back to the good old days of words that rhyme. I love words that rhyme.
this is a good one!
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Hi, excellent, Di
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Good luck and write on, bro.
Dez
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