There ain't no turning back
No matter the consequences
This is gonna be it finally the end of
The madness that seeps out
Cracks long ago sealed insecurities
Faced like you and me, oh holy ghosts
Sometimes play mind signals a switch
See sight's imaginations vividly
picture place in the frame of permanance
Shed'd light chased unknown possibilities
text book'd ends way on the other side waiting
twists the stomach in knots needed
hours to recover hung over jury freedom
never gain results by walking
along solitude rejects and replace
all the countless downtrodden they shine
potential realized at end...
I WIN THE GAME AND LAUGH AS YOU CRY,NOW IN ONE BLAST WATCH THEM ALL DIE!
Author notes
l.o.l. I'm ok! just having fun in the 'dark' l.o.l.
A contest entry
- Kill me with the last line. by Loki.
1750 points, ended July 25, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh my goodness
What write and yes indeed often as people dont realize what they are doing to others often find in a split second how such pain feels . It was a good take on the contest and yes the last line serves it on a silver platter
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you are evily good at this hon oh boy are we the devl twins
i am so proud of you ho and congrads on the cup
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aaww..
Thanks sweet of you to say my friend! thank always for supporting my work!
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lol...what a funny switch here. This was definately different from what you usually do. Good non-the-less though. Lots of stong images leaped out at me...good luck in the contest.
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l.o.l.
yeah, figured I do so many depressing pieces, why not go happy for once! l.o.l. j.k. thanks for the comment and support!
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WHEW!!
had me worried there for a moment...shame on you...smiles...wasnt sure that was you hideing in the dark until i saw that you had won and now the wee light shines through...sighs...you can write just about anything you wish cant you...
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l.o.l.
yeah, I always seem to surprise people with these types of writes, but I've done them before so I don't know why they worry so much! l.o.l. thanks for the comments..
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Whew!!!!
I was worried until i read the Author's note -
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Thanks!
l.o.l. yeah, by now you know I like doing the 'crazy' thoughts thing too! it's fun too you should try it! l.o.l.
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I AM SURE YOU KILLED THEM WITH THE LAST LINE
IT IS CLEVER,
VERY DARK, SEEMS TO FIT THE CONTEST WELL,
ALWAYS WITH A CREATIVE TWIST.
GOD BLESS MY FRIEND...
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Thank you!
truly love the confidence you have in me, it means alot! thank you so much!
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Wow!
'Tis dark in here! Very good word play. Some lines I have been experiancing in the real world. This poem actually talked to me. Good luck in the contest this is a winner for sure.
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Thanks!
The dark calls to me as well! hahaha! l.o.l. no 4 real I appreciate all the continued support!
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Wow, this is so dark, disturbing, depressing... also very gripping and unique! There is some great wordplay and food for thought here. Good luck in the contest!
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l.o.l.
wow, was it dark? I hadn't noticed! l.o.l. thanks alot for the comment my friend!
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LOL. Write on and good luck bro.
Dez
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l.o.l.
for sure I was just trying something whack! Not sure if it worked though! l.o.l. thanks for the comment my friend!
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Thanks for your entry. Good luck.
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thank you
appreciate the comment.
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